Saturday, March 27, 2010

The Agriculture of the Fulani compared to Agriculture of the Ibo

The Agriculture of the Fulani compared to Agriculture of the Ibo

The Fulani, who raised livestock, and the Ibo, who cultivated yams, had very different ways of agriculture; both ways influenced their economy and values. The Fulani relied very heavily on their animals, in fact, “the Fulani are the most thoroughly pastoral people of West Africa: more than half of them raise livestock” (“Fulani”). Fulani people are more dependent on domesticated animals than any other country in West Africa, including Nigeria, were the Ibo live. In the Ibo culture, they are more reliant on crops. Their livelihood depends so greatly on the weather that when it is to wet or to dry, the events are catastrophic. “That year the harvest was sad, like a funeral and many farmers wept as they dug up the miserable and rotting yams” (Achebe 24). The success of an Ibo farmer depends on his crops. The Fulani and Ibo also used their farming aptitude to support their economy, but they did it in different ways. The Fulani traded their dairy products with other tribes, in exchange for cereals and vegetables (“Fulani”). They Fulani did not have vegetables like the Ibo, because they were nomadic (“Fulani”). The Ibo, on the other hand, sold their crops in markets. “The drought continued for eight market weeks and the yams were killed” (Achebe 23). The Ibo people sold their products in markets, unlike the Fulani. The Fulani and the Ibo differ because they the Ibo cultivate vegetables and the Fulani raise animals, and because they differ in agriculture they way they make money off their products differ. The Fulani of Cameroon and Ibo of Nigeria did not live that far part, but developed different ways of succeeding economically through agriculture.

11 comments:

  1. Hi,
    This overall was a very nice paragraph. The sentences flowed well with each other and ideas were stated effectively. However, some points got a little bit wordy and there were a few grammatical errors. Perhaps be a little more concise and direct in terms of what exactly is being contrasted. Still, the writing was very thoughtful and fun to read.
    Keep up the good work!
    -Ayluonne

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  2. Hey Anna,
    I thought that you did a very good job expressing your ideas about the way that the Ibo and the Fulani had very different priorities in terms of what they needed to support themselves. I really liked the way that you organized and expressed your ideas very logically, and with great clarity. You made it very clear to me, as a reader, what the differences were between the two tribes. One thing that I think could have maybe helped with the flow of your paper could have been for you try and make the individual sentences a bit clearer in terms of your word choice. But, I think that you got your over all ideas through well. Great job!

    ~Luke

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  3. Hey,
    I thought this was a great paragraph, it was well organized, strong topic sentence and great conclusion that wrap your paragraph up and related back to the beginning. You also had good transitions between pieces of information. Great job!
    -Kathleen

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  4. You had a good topic sentence and blended your quotes well. You also had good details.
    -Joe

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  5. Overall, this is a strong paragraph. However, some of your sentences could have been truncated to eliminate wordiness. Despite that, you had some very well-chosen and relevant pieces of evidence that were nicely incorporated into your paper.

    Nice work.

    -Gabriel

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  6. Hi,
    Nice work, something that really stood out to me when reading your paragraph was the fact that you mixed in your quotes with you sentences, and that was a great addition. You have a few minor spelling and grammatical errors and you seemed to have cut things or rephrased sentences often. I really enjoyed reading your essay. Great Job.
    -Morgan

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  7. Hey,
    Overall this paragraph shows very solid work. The way you stated your points were varied in many ways to keep the reader interested. I think that you could have taken out some of the uneeded sentences which you would find by rereading this. Great JOB!!!
    Jonny

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  8. Hello,
    I thought the way that you made your piece into a some sort of time line was very creative and it was overall very well written and formed nicely. You used your information well and you understood the context which is always important.
    -Nidalia

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  9. Hey,
    Your paragraph has a nice order, the topic/thesis covers what you're going to talk about throughout the rest of the paragraph. Your conclusion is also very nice, and it successfully restates what the whole paper is about
    Nice Job!
    -Andreas

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  10. I think it's a very well-constructed paragraph that gets to the point. I like how you saw the obvious differences between the tribes, but also went further to see similarities. Great work :)

    Marissa

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  11. Very good. Concrete details, good evidence, and proper citations. I enjoyed reading this and found in well written. However, in a couple places, you repeated yourself. For example,"The Ibo, on the other hand, sold their crops in markets. “The drought continued for eight market weeks and the yams were killed” (Achebe 23). The Ibo people sold their products in markets, unlike the Fulani". This is not necessary, a transition sentence would be far more effective
    -Harry Sherman.

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